Semarang State University
Semarang
State University (USS) is the sixth most favorite campus in Indonesia,
according to okezone.com. SSU located in Semarang, the capital city of Central
Java, Indonesia. It has eight faculties. They are The Faculty of Education Science, The Faculty of Language and Arts, The Faculty of Social Science, The Faculty of Mathematics and Natural, The Faculty of Engineering, The Faculty of Sports Science, The Faculty of Economics and The Faculty of Law. The student body is
approximately 40.000 students enrolled in those 8 faculties. It is a great
number for student body. SSU is also a conservation campus. There are a lot of
trees in each faculty. The members of the campus also try to improve the campus
based on the conservation principle, for example is the auditorium. It built
based on conservation principle. There is no air conditioner in there. The air
can go into the room though the ventilation above the building. It is really a
healthy and comfortable campus.
Dear Untari,
BalasHapusI am glad to read your article. It is easy to understand the ideas. Nevertheless, there is a point that you need to work on.
- Word clearer. You need to think how to make your sentence clear. For example, the sentence 'There is no air conditioner in there', I think it is not efficient in using word 'there'. Therefore, you need to change that into 'There is no air conditioner in that building.'
- Word spelling. You need to always look up the dictionary if you are unsure how to write the word that you mean. For example, the word 'though' on the second sentences from the end of the paragraph, is not appropriate with your sentence. You should change it into 'through', so it will become a meaningful sentence.
Totality, your writing is well. Keep your enthusiasm on writing. Well done!